The Blogger’s Fantasy Notebook #2: Indra, Queen of the Mers

I’m here with part two of my story for Rutvi’s TBFN!

Click HERE to read the first part.


Colorful fish streaked past Mianth the Skinny, Lyric Grimmet, and Ethan as they swam down into the ocean. Beneath the aegean-blue surface, the sea came to life. A rainbow of plants and seashells and fish whirled all around them.

“This is amazing,” Lyric gasped. Swaying seaweed tickled her arms and a school of tiny orange fish zipped through her floating black hair.

Swimming ahead of her, Ethan nodded. “Yep,” he agreed as a shrill dolphin call pierced the magic around them.

“D-dolphinsss?!” Mianth squeaked. The tiny dragon bundled himself up in the drifting white fabric of Lyric’s too-big shirt. “Dolphinsss and ssskinny dragonsss do not mix. Dolphinsss are viciousss. Sssend it away!”

“It’s fine,” Ethan assured them. He reached into his pocket and pulled out the glimmering sand dollar that allowed them to breath under water. “This just has a time limit. The dolphin noise was a warning. It’ll go off every ten minutes.” He shifted through some shells lying on the sand while he talked, searching for Mianth’s claw clam. “The sand dollar lets you breathe underwater for one hundred minutes. Now that the warning had gone off once, we have ninety minutes left. Then it’ll wear off, and we won’t be able to breath down here anymore.”

They had reached the drop off. The reef ended abruptly, and Lyric couldn’t see the ocean floor through the dark water.

“We need to go down there,” Ethan said, pointing. “Claw clams like cold water and darkness. I know because the slave traders forced me to gather them.”

Lyric didn’t want to leave the safety of the reef. But according to Ethan, she’d have to if she wanted Mianth to find his clam so he’d leave her alone. She could feel the dragon trembling around her neck, where he was curled up like a choker necklace. Trying to act brave, she swam out over the drop off. Lyric immediately felt paranoid and exposed, unable to shake the idea that a huge shark might shoot up from the depths and eat her.

Ethan dove down into the darkness, and Lyric followed reluctantly. The water grew steadily colder until she was shivering, and the only bit of warmth was Mianth’s hot water bottle-body. She jumped at every little sound.

Soon, the ocean was so dark that she could barely see Ethan by her side. There was no way they could find the claw clam without a light. Seeming to sense what Lyric was thinking, Ethan took the sand dollar out of his pocket again. It was sending off little sparks of light into the gloom, lighting up the water around them.

Lyric almost screamed when she caught sight of a long eel slithering by them. Another cry nearly escaped when Ethan’s hand unexpectedly slipped into hers.

He tried to smile at her, but she saw the fear in his pine-green eyes. “I don’t want something to snatch you away,” he explained weakly, which didn’t comfort Lyric very much.

But as they traveled yet deeper, she was glad for the small bit of warmth that his hand provided.

They reached the ocean floor again five minutes later, just after the sand dollar beeped for the second time: eighty minutes left. The floor was nothing like the colorful and inhabited reef. Here, the sand was dotted with sharp, holey rocks, spider-like crabs, and the occasional weird plant that looked a bit like an anemone. There was no sign of a clam claw, and Lyric’s head was throbbing from the pressure.

“Ethan –”

His hand was suddenly torn from hers, and his yell echoed in her ears. A hand clamped around Lyric’s mouth, while an arm wrapped around her waist. She kicked and struggled against her attacker, but it was much stronger than her, and she was quickly worn out.

Something shivered against the back of her neck. Mianth. Her attacker hadn’t discovered him yet.

Something cut into her arm, and the only thing keeping her from screaming was the calloused hand over her mouth. Whatever was piercing her skin felt similar to the time she had stepped on a dragon tooth in the dark.

Suddenly woozy, a large, dark green tail came into her blurred vision before she blacked out.

* * *

Lyric woke up in a barred cell. Slumped against the wall, she ached all over. Her wrists hurt from the thick braids of seaweed around them. When her eyesight cleared, she saw Ethan leaning against the opposite wall. She gasped and stared at a circular wound on his shoulder, oozing blood into the water.

He smiled wearily and nodded at her arm.

Lyric glanced down at herself. Her left sleeve was stained a faded red. She rolled up the sleeve with her chin as a wave of dizziness swept over her. A matching wound was cut into her arm.

“Sedative,” Ethan muttered. “The mers aren’t very good at giving shots, are they?”

Sedatives. Mers. The words swam around inside her head. “Mermaids?” she croaked.

Ethan gestured at the bars on their cell. Two buff merman, one with a dark green tail, the other a deep red, patrolled the corridor. While Lyric and Ethan watched, the red one swam over to their door and inserted a key that looked like a razor clam shell into the lock. He grabbed Lyric roughly by the arm and dragged her out of the cell. The green merman seized Ethan and closed the door.

The merman led them down the hallway. They reached a soaring double door with seahorses and dolphins carved into it. A petite mermaid with a lavender tail and a strapless white top hurried over to them.

“How long ago did you blow on them?” she asked, peering at Lyric and Ethan with wonder.

“We didn’t,” the red merman grunted. “They had one on them.” A dolphin-call warning choose that moment to shriek from his shirt pocket. “Fifth time it’s beeped.”

Ethan and Lyric glanced at each other. It had beeped twice for them — twenty minutes gone — and five times for the guards — seventy minutes. They were running out of time.

“I’ll take them off your hands,” the mermaid promised. Lyric and Ethan were thrust toward her, as well as the sand dollar. “I’m Delmara,” she told the children as the guards swam away. “Queen Indra has summoned you.” She tucked her long golden hair behind her ears, straightened Lyric’s shirt, and tsked at Ethan. Then she shoved open the doors and lead the captives inside.

Lyric was greeted by a wall of seaweed, stretching all the way up to the domed ceiling. The swirling blue-green floor was made of abalone.


Delmara parted the seaweed to reveal the throne.

Lyric pulled at her shirt and whispered, “It’s hot.” It felt like a hot tub.

The mermaid nodded. “It has to be, to hide her ice-cold heart of stone.” She ushered them through the seaweed and made them bow before the queen.

Queen Indra was intimidating. Her dark brown hair was twisted into an elaborate knot atop her head. Her eyes, the same blue-gray as her tail, were critical. Her face was stern but beautiful.

“Who are you?” Her voice was deep and rich.

Lyric tried to answer, but the words wouldn’t come. Thankfully, Ethan stepped forward and said, “Queen Indra, I am Ethan Bradley, and this is Lyric Grimmet.”

She leaned forward in her throne. It was the color of sand, decorated with shells and starfish and other treasures of the ocean. “What brings you to my kingdom, young humans? This is not your domain.”

Ethan snorted. “Your guards brought us here.” As an afterthought, he added, “Your Highness.”

“What Ethan means, Queen Indra,” Lyric blurted, glaring at Ethan, “is that we were searching for a claw clam when your guards found us. We’re sorry to bother you.”

“A claw clam,” she murmured, her storm-gray eyes settling on Ethan. She rose from her throne and swam forward gracefully. Queen Indra untied their bonds, took their hands, and led them toward her throne. She left them in front of it and ducked behind the chair. When she came back out, she had a thin box in her hands, and her expression had soften considerably. She settled back into her throne, opened the box, and announced, “This is the story of the burnt rose.”

Burnt Rose.jpg

Queen Indra pulled a flower out of the box. The shriveled red blossom on the end was blackened around the edges. The rose was somehow perfectly dry.

“When I was younger, I fell in love with a human. He came to the beach everyday to fish. I hid in the reef and watched him silently. For months, he didn’t know I was there, until I threw myself onto the beach to get his attention. You see, I was deeply in love, and it drove me mad that he didn’t know of my existence.

“He ran over to me as I lay in the shallows. I told him my name, and I learned his: Tyler. After that, instead of fishing, Tyler spent the days talking to me. I always caught fish in the reef for him so he wouldn’t go hungry.

“A month after I learned his name, he informed me that his mother, his last living relative, had passed away. I suggested that he come live here in the kingdom. Tyler eagerly agreed — he had fallen in love with me — and left to gather his few belongings.

“While I waited for him to return, the sky turned red with fire. Dragons were attacking the land.” She hissed the word dragons with venom. “I feared for his life. My tears mixed with the sea.

“Just when I had resigned myself to the fact that my love was dead, he ran onto the beach. There was a sack over his shoulder and a perfect rose in his hand. As soon as I saw him coming, I took my sand dollar from my pocket. He crashed into the waves, but before I could blow on him, a dragon swooped down from the sky and shot its fire over the beach.” Queen Indra motioned at her arms, which, Lyric realized, were tight and pocked. Burn scars.

“I was panicking. We were horribly burned, and the dragons were attacking us. I used my sand dollar on Tyler and helped him swim to my kingdom. I was convinced that the healer could save him, for he in a much worse state than I was: burned all over. We arrived at the healer, and she quickly got to work. I begged her to help Tyler, but she said that I, as the queen, was her first priority.

“Once she had tended my burns, she moved on to Tyler. There was a time where he seemed to be at death’s door, but the healer helped him through it. She told me that he would survive. I was overjoyed at the thought of what my future held: we could get married and rule the entire ocean.

“Oh, but I had forgotten one terribly important thing: Tyler was human. He could only breathe underwater because of the sand dollar. And then it ran out. The healer started screaming, and Tyler was clawing at his throat. I grabbed him and swam to the surface as fast as I could.

“But it was too late.”

Lyric felt terrible for Queen Indra. She knew what it was like to loose a loved one. Her mother had been killed by dragons when she was only three years old.

“I still had his rose,” she said, smiling fondly. “I am telling you this,” Queen Indra continued, watching Ethan, “because Tyler’s last name was Bradley. I believe that he was lying when he said that his mother was his only living relative. Tell me, Ethan Bradley, is your mother alive?”

Ethan was breathing hard, staring at the floor. He opened his mouth to speak when a horrible dolphin-call alarm erupted in the room.

Lyric suddenly felt immense pressure crashing down on her body. She couldn’t breathe.

Zero minutes left.

Delmara’s voice sounded distant as she squeaked, “It went off several times, Your Majesty! I was trying to get your attention . . .”

Lyric and Ethan grabbed each others’ hands as they ran out of air.




I included three prompts (the one above, and the two in the text) and used a dragon. ;)




12 thoughts on “The Blogger’s Fantasy Notebook #2: Indra, Queen of the Mers

  1. Allison says:

    That was super, Loren! I wanted to keep reading – it was like a real book! This is one of my favorite of your challenge stories. :) I can’t wait to read more!


  2. Lana says:

    Ooh, very interesting! I love the description of Queen Indra and the tale of the burnt rose. The one thing I was confused about with that was why she hadn’t blown on Tyler to make sure he could breathe underwater after the dragon had burnt them…was she just in shock or something? Regardless it was really interesting and I loved the twist where we found out Tyler was Ethan’s dad (which makes sense, because that’s how Ethan knew to use the sand dollar!). The last two prompts were integrated in really smoothly. The first seemed a little odd, but only because there had been so much emphasis on how cold the water was before, and then it was suddenly really hot. Speaking of which, you did a really good job of emphasizing the cold without making it feel over-emphasized or repeated. I really liked this part! It was awesome.


  3. Rutvi says:

    (I’m having trouble grading you, if your stories are all gonna be this amazing I might have to give you perfect scores…. And we both know I’m too evil to do THAT. XD) JK!!


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